美國(guó)是個(gè)非常美麗的國(guó)家，資本高度發(fā)達(dá)的世界第一強(qiáng)國(guó)，也是文化多元化的移民國(guó)家，美國(guó)的社會(huì)福利好，生活環(huán)境優(yōu)，是世界上教育質(zhì)量最高的國(guó)家之一。美國(guó)是世界上教育事業(yè)最發(fā)達(dá)的國(guó)家之一。美國(guó)教育體系早在其建國(guó)時(shí)就初具規(guī)模。今天出國(guó)留學(xué)網(wǎng)為大家?guī)?lái)了美國(guó)留學(xué)文書修改竅門。
好essay是改出來(lái)的
我一直堅(jiān)信好essay是改出來(lái)的，而非寫出來(lái)的，建議大家重視對(duì)essay的反復(fù)修改。AO 沒有太多時(shí)間來(lái)看一篇文章，每天要被無(wú)數(shù)篇世界各地的文章轟擊，文字閱讀的愉悅感一定可以幫助你的內(nèi)容更易于被接受。所謂文字的愉悅感，在現(xiàn)代社會(huì)其實(shí)就是清爽，要有一定的幽默感但又不能太作，要有一定的寫作技巧又不能太滑。原則上，清爽風(fēng)趣的文字就是簡(jiǎn)潔有張力的。
針對(duì)簡(jiǎn)潔有一個(gè)小竅門：就是減少使用adj形容詞，改用v動(dòng)詞。西方文化對(duì)動(dòng)詞的熱愛簡(jiǎn)直無(wú)與倫比。后期的修改需要注意的事項(xiàng)：
(1)內(nèi)容核對(duì)是重中之重，查看是必須介紹而被你遺漏的地方;
(2)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤是關(guān)鍵，尋找英語(yǔ)過了專八的前輩，實(shí)在不行尋找一些便宜的網(wǎng)上機(jī)構(gòu)協(xié)助核對(duì)審查一遍。也可以尋找英語(yǔ)專業(yè)的教師幫你查閱審核一遍?？傊M可能確保語(yǔ)言語(yǔ)法上不出現(xiàn)失誤。
(3)以往的留學(xué)申請(qǐng)都是通過紙質(zhì)媒介，國(guó)內(nèi)早期的申請(qǐng)還會(huì)涉及到個(gè)人書法筆跡的問題，書法書寫好的同學(xué)再材料審閱中會(huì)有相當(dāng)大的優(yōu)勢(shì)。但目前多以email的方式發(fā)送申請(qǐng)材料，這樣節(jié)約了材料成本和時(shí)間成本，方便大家被pass后能第一時(shí)間選擇下家。無(wú)論是紙質(zhì)材料還是電子版材料，保證材料的干凈整潔、排版思路清晰，邏輯思維得體，不要出現(xiàn)雜亂無(wú)章的描述。
留學(xué)文書的整體思路就是：構(gòu)思——寫作——完善，每一個(gè)部分都是非常重要的，不要覺得TG成績(jī)、GPA成績(jī)牛得不行，教授推薦信都是好話，科研論文杠杠的，隨便糊弄一下“留學(xué)文書”就一定能上HU或UC這樣的世界級(jí)頂尖大學(xué)。那是絕對(duì)不可能的，除非他們的老師都瞎了。因此，花了那么多時(shí)間在GPA和GRE上，最后一步的留學(xué)文書也請(qǐng)多花一些精力和時(shí)間。
附上一名優(yōu)秀申請(qǐng)者的留學(xué)文書原文，僅供學(xué)習(xí)和參考：
12年級(jí)學(xué)生Brittany Stinson在上周四得知她被五所常春藤大學(xué)-耶魯、哥倫比亞、賓夕法尼亞、達(dá)特茅斯、康奈爾以及斯坦福大學(xué)錄取。斯坦福大學(xué)去年的錄取率是4.69%-比任何一所常春藤大學(xué)都低。Brittany Stinson在接受采訪時(shí)說(shuō)“我還在消化這個(gè)結(jié)果，我太興奮了”。是什么讓她被這幾所名校青睞?Brittany Stinson自己的解釋是：自己的文書。
下面是Brittany Stinson用來(lái)申請(qǐng)這些名校的Common App文書：
Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. Managing to break free from my mother’s grasp, I charged. With arms flailing and chubbylegs fluttering beneath me, I was the ferocious two year old rampaging through Costco on a Saturday morning. My mother’s eyes widened in horroras I jettisoned my churro; the cinnamon? sugar rocket gracefully sliced its way through the air while I continued my spree. I sprinted through the aisles,looking up in awe at the massive bulk products that towered over me.Overcome with wonder, I wanted to touch and taste, to stick my head intoindustrial?sized freezers, to explore every crevice. I was a conquistador, butrather than searching the land for El Dorado, I scoured aisles for free samples. Before inevitably being whisked away into a shopping cart, Iscaled a mountain of plush toys and surveyed the expanse that lay before me:the kingdom of Costco.Notorious forits oversized portions and dollar? fifty hot dog combo, Costco is the apex of consumerism. From the days spent being toted around in a shopping cartto when I was finally tall enough to reach lofty sample trays, Costco hasendured a steady presence throughout my life. As a veteran Costco shopper,I navigate the aisles of foodstuffs, thrusting the majority of my weight upon agenerously filled shopping cart whose enormity juxtaposes my small frame.Over time, I’ve developed a habit of observing fellow patrons tote theircarts piled with frozen burritos, cheese puffs, tubs of ice cream, and weight?loss supplements.Perusing the aisles gave me time to ponder. Who needs three pounds of sourcream? Was cultured yogurt any more well?mannered than its unculturedcounterpart? Costco gave birth to my unfettered curiosity. While enjoying an obligatory hot dog, I did not find myself thinking about the ‘allbeef’ goodness that Costco boasted. I instead considered finitudes andinfinitudes, unimagined uses for tubs of sour cream, the projectile motionof said tub when launched from an eighty foot shelf or maybe when pushed from aspeedy cart by a scrawny seventeen year old. I contemplated thephilosophical: If there exists a thirty?three ounce jar of Nutella, do wereally have free will? I experienced a harsh physics lesson while observing ashopper who had no evident familiarity of inertia's workings. With a cartfilled to overflowing, she made her way towards the sloped exit,continuing to push and push while steadily losing control until the cartescaped her and went crashing into a concrete column, 52” plasma screen TVand all. Purchasing the yuletide hickory smoked ham inevitably led to aconversation between my father and me about Andrew Jackson’s controversiality.There was no questioning Old Hickory’s dedication; he was steadfast in hisbeliefs and pursuits – ualities I am compelled to admire, yet his moralswere crooked. We both found the ham to be more likeable–and tender. I adopted my exploratory skills, fine tuned by Costco, towards my intellectual endeavors.Just as I sampled buffalo?chicken dip or chocolate truffles, I probed therealms of history, dance and biology, all in pursuit of the ideal cart–oneoverflowing with theoretical situations and notions both silly and serious.I sampled calculus, cross?country running, scientific research, all ofwhich are now household favorites. With cart in hand, I do what scares me;I absorb the warehouse that is the world. Whether it be through attemptingaerial yoga, learning how to chart blackbody radiation using astronomicalsoftware, or dancing in front of hundreds of people, I am compelled to tryany activity that interests me in the slightest. My intense desire to know, to explore beyond the bounds of rational thought; this is whatdefines me. Costco fuels my insatiability and cultivates curiosity withinme at a cellular level. Encoded to immerse myself in the unknown, I findit difficult to complacently accept the “what”; I want to hunt for the “whys”and dissectthe “hows”. In essence, I subsist on discovery.
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