下面是出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)提供的托福作文話題：如果你有足夠的錢，是買房還是做生意？
托福寫作題目
You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.如果你有足夠的錢，是買房還是做生意?
托福寫作范文
If I had enough money to purchase either a house or a business, I would choose a business. A house is attractive to me, for it may bring me shelter and comforts. However, I like a business better, because a business offers me much more.
A business is a challenge for me. I like to embrace new challenges which, I believe, are good opportunities to develop and exhibit my abilities. I admire Bill Gates, not only for his talent, but also for his courage. I am confident of my capability; still, I need real opportunity to test it. No matter if it is success or failure that I will have to face, it is a new experience for me. After all, real satisfaction is in the traveling, not arriving. I have learned a lot from books, but I don’t have enough experience. Therefore, learning by doing is my ideal，and running a business can help me fulfill it. I can hone my abilities during this process, and become more and more mature at the same time.
A house may satisfy my immediate needs, while a business may bring me long-term satisfaction. If I have a house, I will have a place to live, feeling warm and sheltered. There is almost no further benefits. By contrast, a business has more potential for losses or gains. If I am really as capable as I have expected, it will probably be gains. Even the potential itself is exciting enough for me. According to Maslow’s needs hierarchy, housing is a basic need, while running a business of my own and for myself, belongs to the needs of self-actualization, the highest one. Many people can satisfy their basic needs, but only a small number can reach the highest level.
If I have to choose between either a house or a business, I will choose the latter, because if I succeed in running it, I will be able to buy a house as well as many other things. However, if I choose a house, I will own only a house, nothing more.
托福寫作滿分要素剖析
一、 語言表達
這篇文章并不像其它眾多范文一樣大量充斥著長難句以及高深的用詞，大家仔細閱讀可以發(fā)現(xiàn)，文章擅長用短小精煉的單句或者簡單的復(fù)合句進行犀利的論證，表達觀點時用詞精煉，言簡意賅。長短句的結(jié)合也恰到好處，句子收放自如。
1、“I like to embrace new challenges”中的”embrace”用的十分生動。通常人們都是會用accept challenges, 而作者在這里用這個詞表示愿意“擁抱”挑戰(zhàn)，可見其形象而又地道的用詞。
“hone one’s ability”也是一種較高級的表達方法。也是同學(xué)們可以借鑒的表達。
2、本文并沒有太多的從句，有一兩處定語從句值得一提。“I like to embrace new challenges which, I believe, are good opportunities to develop and exhibit my abilities.” Which 引導(dǎo)的定語從句進一步修飾了challenges 對作者的意義。而I believe 這一插入語的巧妙運用，在增強語言表達效果上起著重要的作用。
3、文章雖然沒有高深莫測的長難句，每一句幾乎都淺顯易懂，但也不乏許多充滿哲理的句子。例如：“After all, real satisfaction is in the traveling, not arriving.” 其實當(dāng)下很多文章都喜歡把一些人生哲理與人的旅途結(jié)合起來，道理雖然簡單，但卻發(fā)人深省。作者也是巧妙的掌握了這一點，把對滿足感的追求與人生旅程結(jié)合在一起。
二、 邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)
文章結(jié)構(gòu)是典型的總分總結(jié)構(gòu)，文章最大的亮點就是說服力強的論據(jù)和邏輯性強，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹?shù)恼撟C過程。這些都是值得同學(xué)們好好借鑒學(xué)習(xí)的。作者在第一段就給出明確的論點，強調(diào)需要的是一份事業(yè)而非房子，因為事業(yè)可以給他帶來更多。在隨后的兩段里，作者對這個“多”展開了一系列嚴謹而充分的論述。通過追求事業(yè)，人們可以積累經(jīng)驗財富，并且把學(xué)到的東西用于實踐，最終達到自我實現(xiàn)的目標。其中最值得一提的是作者引用了兩個強有力的實例——比爾蓋茨和馬斯。