對于很多正在準備托??荚嚨娜藗儊碚f,不知道準備的怎么樣了呢?今天就和出國留學(xué)網(wǎng)的小編一起來了解一下托??谡Z優(yōu)秀范文:成為藝術(shù)家需要天賦。
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托??谡Z題目:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person needs talent to be an artist.
托??谡Z參考范文:
Well, I believe one can never be a real artist without some talents.
The first one is the talent to be creative because artists cannot just copy others' works but have to create their own ones. And this kind of ability cannot be taught by any teacher or be acquired through practicing.
The second one is the talent to realize the mission of being an artist cause artists are not just interested in arts, but determined to devote themselves to this career. For example, a 4-year-old artist, Aelita, said she’s going to paint for 24 hours. This is not something her parents told her, but an innate desire.
托??谡Z參考答案:
Well, I believe one can never be a real artist without some talents.
【觀點】缺少某些天賦,一個人就不能成為一位真正的藝術(shù)家。
The first one is the talent to be creative because artists cannot just copy others' works but have to create their own ones. And this kind of ability cannot be taught by any teacher or be acquired through practicing.
【理由1】第一種天賦是創(chuàng)造力。這是任何老師都無法教給我們的,是通過無論多少次練習都無法習得的。
The second one is the talent to realize the mission of being an artist cause artists are not just interested in arts, but determined to devote themselves to this career. For example, a 4-year-old artist, Aelita, said she’s going to paint for 24 hours. This is not something her parents told her, but an innate desire.
【理由2】第二種天賦是意識到一名藝術(shù)家的使命,一種能夠為了藝術(shù)奉獻一生的精神——這是一種與生俱來的渴望,而不是誰教給他們的。
托福口語模板分析:
托??荚?,沒指望大家說得、寫得多么Native,但求你能讓人家聽懂、看懂,就只要做到Clear&Accurate就夠了!但是!還是有一批又一批的同學(xué)在說著和寫著一些邏輯十分混亂的答案,這讓人家要如何跟上你魔鬼的步伐?!如何給你高分?!
具體結(jié)合今天的題目:請大家務(wù)必看清今天的statement: A person needs talent to be an artist. 一個人需要天賦來成為一名藝術(shù)家。
要如何論證?要緊緊圍繞:talent 和 to be an artist之間的關(guān)系來論證!
(1)如果你Agree,請說明,talent是如何讓一個人變成artist的;
(2)如果你Disagree,請論證一個人為什么【沒有talent】也能成為artist。請注意:是論證:沒有talent的人也能成為artist!
可是我們看到同學(xué)們的回答是什么?
Personally speaking, I disagree with the statement cause first, I think +being hard-working is an key factor to the success of an artist. (我不同意這種說法——我不認為一個人需要天賦才能成為一名藝術(shù)家。因為努力是藝術(shù)家們獲得成功的關(guān)鍵因素。)If people don't work hard, even though they have talent, they still have no way to prove it. 如果不努力,即使有天賦,也沒有機會展示。For instance, one of the most genius pianist, Langlang, has to practice 10 hours every day, which helps him to show his talents. 比如,最天才的鋼琴家之一,郎朗,每天都不得不練習10個小時,這才讓他得以展示自己的天賦。
同志們,這是嚴重跑題 + 打臉啊!
跑題:題目問你:“做藝術(shù)家,需不需要天賦?”你回答:“做藝術(shù)家,必須要努力?!?額……親吶,請正面回答問題好嗎?你這就好像:老婆問老公:你愛我嗎?老公回答:我不愛林志玲?!灸悄銗畚覇??誰管你不愛誰???!同理:做藝術(shù)家,必須要努力。那天賦需不需要呢?誰管你需不需要努力呀?】
打臉:緊接著,這位同學(xué)舉了郎朗(后邊還舉了昨天推送的Aelita的例子),來證明自己:I disagree with the statement 的觀點,親吶!你還記得自己大明湖畔的觀點嗎?還記得自己disagree的是個什么statement? Statement說:A person needs talent to be an artist. 一個人需要天賦來成為一名藝術(shù)家。然后你舉的例子里全都是【有天賦】的藝術(shù)家——這不正好說明藝術(shù)家都需要有天賦嗎?
好,那么要怎么修改呢?我先來改一下中文:
我不同意這種說法——我不認為一個人需要天賦才能成為一名藝術(shù)家。因為【沒有天賦的人,只是依靠后天的努力就能成為藝術(shù)家】
對比原話:【努力是藝術(shù)家們獲得成功的關(guān)鍵因素】
你get到這個區(qū)別了嗎?對的!就是是否提及【沒有天賦】這個變量。這個太重要了!這就是實驗中講的:控制變量法。
理由句:【通過努力,即使是沒有任何藝術(shù)天賦的人,也能成功】
對比原話:【如果不努力,即使有天賦,也沒有機會展示?!?BR> 修改的重點:決不能說:“即使有天賦”,都有天賦了,你還說啥!你不認同的觀點是:非得有天賦,才能成為藝術(shù)家。所以,你得說“即使沒有天賦,也能成為藝術(shù)家”——這才是反駁好嗎?!
修改英文:
Personally speaking, I disagree with the statement cause people who have no talent can also be artists simply through working hard. Just as a saying goes, nurture wins nature. Through years of training and thousands of practicing, even a person with no innate gift can still be an excellent artist. 【這個時候,你舉例子當然不能舉什么郎朗、小Aelita這種天才啦!倒是可以舉一些先天條件不足的人。比如,可以編個故事,有個人從小就是五音不全——先天條件極差,經(jīng)歷了多年的培訓(xùn)和反復(fù)的練習,最后居然成了一名歌唱家。】
如上所示,大家不難看出,這確實是一道難題。很多同學(xué)都掉入了跑題的陷阱。
接下來,Pt來介紹一些值得積累的表達:
1. 【artists cannot just copy others' works】“work”這個詞當“作品”講時,是一個可數(shù)名詞哦!當“工作”講的時候不可數(shù)
2. 【be interested in sth.】對某事感興趣。如果是懷有極大的興趣,你可以說:have passion for sth.
3. 【devote oneself to sth.】 致力于/獻身于…… = give all your attention and effort to one particular thing, 你還可以說dedicate oneself/ one's life to sth.
4. 【an innate desire】一種與生俱來的渴望(還有一個叫“內(nèi)心的渴望” = inner desire)
請注意:這里不能用inherent替代innate。我們看innate的英文解釋 = an innate quality or ability is something you are born with 【素質(zhì)】天生的,與生俱來的;
而inherent是什么意思呢?a quality that is inherent in something is a natural part of it and cannot be separated from it 內(nèi)在的,固有的,是某物的一部分或不能與之分開。例句:I am afraid the problems you mention are inherent in the system. 你體積的這些問題恐怕本來就存在于這個體制中。(是一種體制內(nèi)在固有的問題)