I often hear some students complain that the world is unfair to them. Good chance seems [chances seem ] （1）always to belong to the good students' special possession （所有，擁有） （2 ） . In fact， they are wrong. The world is so fair to everyone that chance only belongs [chances belong ] （3 ） to those who have brains . We must know that we need to find chances while chances will not find us.
Some other students often seem worried because they don't know how to find a chance. In that case， I want to tell them this. First， “believe yourself” . We know we are all the same. So when you do something， you should believe you are the best and you can do everything well. In this way， you can try your best to do everything well. And what's more， study hard and get yourself ready all the time so that when a chance comes， you will not have to let it go.
The modern world is full of competition. Before long， we'll leave school. So from now on we should learn how to catch a chance and hold it in our hands， and how to use it well. Only in this way， we would be possible to win [can we hopefully live] （4） a successful life.
江西省寧岡中學(xué)高三（1）班 鐘鳴薈
評 語
文章雖短，但議論的題目反映了不少學(xué)生中存在的實際問題。如何尋找機會，把握機遇是值得現(xiàn)代學(xué)生認(rèn)真思考的。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)體現(xiàn)出了英語議論文的特點，但語言較一般，有些典型錯誤，值得提出來進(jìn)行點評：
（1）、（3）chance可作可數(shù)或不可數(shù)名詞用。指“具體的機會”時，作可數(shù)名詞。表示“機遇”、“運氣”、“偶然性”時，可作不可數(shù)名詞，如： Chance plays an important part in many card games.根據(jù) Longman詞典： chance表示“機運”時，其實是表示一種難以知道原因、人所難以把握的事情。但根據(jù)本文的上下文，要“抓住”的是“機會”，而非“機運”，因此，chance用作可數(shù)名詞為好。
（2）前面用了 belong to，這里斜體部分是多余的。
（4）原文有兩個較為典型的錯誤，一是“only+狀語”開頭的句子，應(yīng)該用倒裝句，二是possible不能用于“實體主語+be＋possible to do sth.”的句型，而要說It（形式主語）is possible for sb./sth.to do…。比如不能說：He is possible to come at seven.向要說： It is possible for him to come at seven.
Some other students often seem worried because they don't know how to find a chance. In that case， I want to tell them this. First， “believe yourself” . We know we are all the same. So when you do something， you should believe you are the best and you can do everything well. In this way， you can try your best to do everything well. And what's more， study hard and get yourself ready all the time so that when a chance comes， you will not have to let it go.
The modern world is full of competition. Before long， we'll leave school. So from now on we should learn how to catch a chance and hold it in our hands， and how to use it well. Only in this way， we would be possible to win [can we hopefully live] （4） a successful life.
江西省寧岡中學(xué)高三（1）班 鐘鳴薈
評 語
文章雖短，但議論的題目反映了不少學(xué)生中存在的實際問題。如何尋找機會，把握機遇是值得現(xiàn)代學(xué)生認(rèn)真思考的。文章的結(jié)構(gòu)體現(xiàn)出了英語議論文的特點，但語言較一般，有些典型錯誤，值得提出來進(jìn)行點評：
（1）、（3）chance可作可數(shù)或不可數(shù)名詞用。指“具體的機會”時，作可數(shù)名詞。表示“機遇”、“運氣”、“偶然性”時，可作不可數(shù)名詞，如： Chance plays an important part in many card games.根據(jù) Longman詞典： chance表示“機運”時，其實是表示一種難以知道原因、人所難以把握的事情。但根據(jù)本文的上下文，要“抓住”的是“機會”，而非“機運”，因此，chance用作可數(shù)名詞為好。
（2）前面用了 belong to，這里斜體部分是多余的。
（4）原文有兩個較為典型的錯誤，一是“only+狀語”開頭的句子，應(yīng)該用倒裝句，二是possible不能用于“實體主語+be＋possible to do sth.”的句型，而要說It（形式主語）is possible for sb./sth.to do…。比如不能說：He is possible to come at seven.向要說： It is possible for him to come at seven.