It was nine o'clock at night， and I had studied for just half an hour， I wanted to go on but my eyes didn't allow me to do so. My eyes got tired and saw the words in troubles [with difficulty ]（1）。 I had to relax them though there was no any use [it seemed useless] （2）。
Looking back to my past， I'm full of regret. I came to this world with two bright eyes. I thought this was something natural. I enjoyed reading books even under faint light [dim light] （3）。 I watched TV for more than three hours without a break.Also， I used to read in bed. Whenever my father warned me against the wrong use of my eyes， I always replied， “It doesn't matter. My eyes are the best.”
However， one day， I began to find I couldn't see clearly the words on the blackboard within five metres. The doctor told me I became near-sighted. “It is impossible，”I cried. “But this is the fact. Your bad habit cost you your eye-sight [your normal eye-sight] （4）?！?BR> Now I try [am trying] （5） many ways to regain my sight [good sight] （6）。 But you can see they have little effect. Something that was lost is usually not so easy to recover. One who has good eyes has great wealth， I believe. I must learn a lesson from my own experience.
陜西省耀縣中學(xué) 張竹娟
評 語
保護視力的重要性是不言而喻的。但是很多學(xué)生由于不良的用眼習(xí)慣，常常不自覺地?fù)p害了自己的視力，這篇作文生動地反映了這一點。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）in trouble 是“處于困難、危險的境地”，故改之。
（2）原句no any用錯了，there be句型也欠妥。
（3）faint有“微弱的”意思，但一般指聲音。指光線的“微弱”，要用dim.這種漢語相同，但英語不同的情況，對于英語學(xué)習(xí)者來說要特別注意。
（4）、（6）原文也可理解為“失明”和“重見光明”。改后含義清楚些。
（5）這里根據(jù)上下文，用現(xiàn)在進行時為好。
Looking back to my past， I'm full of regret. I came to this world with two bright eyes. I thought this was something natural. I enjoyed reading books even under faint light [dim light] （3）。 I watched TV for more than three hours without a break.Also， I used to read in bed. Whenever my father warned me against the wrong use of my eyes， I always replied， “It doesn't matter. My eyes are the best.”
However， one day， I began to find I couldn't see clearly the words on the blackboard within five metres. The doctor told me I became near-sighted. “It is impossible，”I cried. “But this is the fact. Your bad habit cost you your eye-sight [your normal eye-sight] （4）?！?BR> Now I try [am trying] （5） many ways to regain my sight [good sight] （6）。 But you can see they have little effect. Something that was lost is usually not so easy to recover. One who has good eyes has great wealth， I believe. I must learn a lesson from my own experience.
陜西省耀縣中學(xué) 張竹娟
評 語
保護視力的重要性是不言而喻的。但是很多學(xué)生由于不良的用眼習(xí)慣，常常不自覺地?fù)p害了自己的視力，這篇作文生動地反映了這一點。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）in trouble 是“處于困難、危險的境地”，故改之。
（2）原句no any用錯了，there be句型也欠妥。
（3）faint有“微弱的”意思，但一般指聲音。指光線的“微弱”，要用dim.這種漢語相同，但英語不同的情況，對于英語學(xué)習(xí)者來說要特別注意。
（4）、（6）原文也可理解為“失明”和“重見光明”。改后含義清楚些。
（5）這里根據(jù)上下文，用現(xiàn)在進行時為好。