As is known， football as a sport is getting more and more popular， and it is loved by people around the world， tall and short， fat and thin， old and young.
If you ask me what I think of football， I can tell you： I love nothing more than football.
To tell you the truth， I have been a football fan for more than five years though I am only 15 years old. I did not understand why so many football fans were madly [mad] （1） about football until I became a football fan [one of them myself] （2） .
Recently I watched World Cup （世界杯）。 Many football stars displayed their skills to the full. I admired for [admired] （3） their wonderful skills. It is obvious that it's [it was] （4） a high level World Cup. In the end， Brazil team got the gold medal， which I think it deserved （應(yīng)得到）。
In this World Cup， the best football star， in my opinion，was Christman although the winner was not the Germany team. That's why I have given myself an English name——Aaron Christman.
I not only watch football matches but also play football. I often spend my spare time playing football with other. I hear of [hear] （5） that a football tournament（錦標賽） will be held in my school pretty soon. If so， I will take an active part in it so that our class team will get the championship.
Oh， football， I'll love you for ever.
上海市崇明縣三烈中學(xué)高一（1）班 沈慶豐
評 語
有人嘆息道：中國足球真像一場難圓的夢。但令人欣慰的是，現(xiàn)在已有越來越多的人（包括眾多的中學(xué)生）開始關(guān)心、熱愛足球。本文表現(xiàn)的就是這樣一個中學(xué)生球迷的心聲。從語言角度講，文章寫得較為流暢，短語、從句使用也較貼切。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）這里應(yīng)該用形容詞mad.
（2）改后避免重復(fù)，加上myself使表達更為有力。
（3）這里admire應(yīng)該是及物動詞。
（4）原文時態(tài)用錯了。
（5）hear of后接名詞，如：Have you ever heard of such a thing？但后接that從句時，無需用介詞of.
If you ask me what I think of football， I can tell you： I love nothing more than football.
To tell you the truth， I have been a football fan for more than five years though I am only 15 years old. I did not understand why so many football fans were madly [mad] （1） about football until I became a football fan [one of them myself] （2） .
Recently I watched World Cup （世界杯）。 Many football stars displayed their skills to the full. I admired for [admired] （3） their wonderful skills. It is obvious that it's [it was] （4） a high level World Cup. In the end， Brazil team got the gold medal， which I think it deserved （應(yīng)得到）。
In this World Cup， the best football star， in my opinion，was Christman although the winner was not the Germany team. That's why I have given myself an English name——Aaron Christman.
I not only watch football matches but also play football. I often spend my spare time playing football with other. I hear of [hear] （5） that a football tournament（錦標賽） will be held in my school pretty soon. If so， I will take an active part in it so that our class team will get the championship.
Oh， football， I'll love you for ever.
上海市崇明縣三烈中學(xué)高一（1）班 沈慶豐
評 語
有人嘆息道：中國足球真像一場難圓的夢。但令人欣慰的是，現(xiàn)在已有越來越多的人（包括眾多的中學(xué)生）開始關(guān)心、熱愛足球。本文表現(xiàn)的就是這樣一個中學(xué)生球迷的心聲。從語言角度講，文章寫得較為流暢，短語、從句使用也較貼切。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）這里應(yīng)該用形容詞mad.
（2）改后避免重復(fù)，加上myself使表達更為有力。
（3）這里admire應(yīng)該是及物動詞。
（4）原文時態(tài)用錯了。
（5）hear of后接名詞，如：Have you ever heard of such a thing？但后接that從句時，無需用介詞of.