As I sat in my room one summer day preparing my lessons， I felt that the weather was very warm and disagreeable （不適意） . The sun shone brightly and the birds kept perching （棲息） on the trees which， as there was no wind， made no stir （搖動(dòng)）。 Sud denly a dark cloud hid the sun. The wind began to blow. I knew that a storm would soon come.
The sky is full of black clouds. Flashes （閃光） of lightning lit up （照亮） the courts （天井） ， old houses， and ramshackle porches （搖搖欲墜的走廊）， and thunder begins to roar overhead. No birds sing any longer， but the leaves of the trees rustle （作沙沙聲） and a wind blows against our faces. A drop of water falls， then another， and then the rain falls on the leaves of the trees and the iron roofs with a noise reminding us of the beating of drums. A brilliant stripe （條，帶） of light fills the sky. Suddenly there comes a terrible thunderclap （雷鳴） overhead， and then the sky is full of roars of thunder.
After a while， the rain stopped and the thunder and lightning ceased. The sky became blue again， and the birds once more sang sweetly， while the trees and the flowers seemed almost as happy as before.
評(píng) 語
作者在仔細(xì)觀察的基礎(chǔ)上，動(dòng)用了大量具有“光”、“聲”、“色”等特點(diǎn)的動(dòng)詞、形容詞，運(yùn)用了比喻的手法生動(dòng)地描述了一次雷雨的過程。不過，文中部分時(shí)態(tài)值得商榷。如果為了生動(dòng)，在描述時(shí)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)代替過去時(shí)是可以的，但第二段第二句中的lit up也要改作一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，以求一致。
The sky is full of black clouds. Flashes （閃光） of lightning lit up （照亮） the courts （天井） ， old houses， and ramshackle porches （搖搖欲墜的走廊）， and thunder begins to roar overhead. No birds sing any longer， but the leaves of the trees rustle （作沙沙聲） and a wind blows against our faces. A drop of water falls， then another， and then the rain falls on the leaves of the trees and the iron roofs with a noise reminding us of the beating of drums. A brilliant stripe （條，帶） of light fills the sky. Suddenly there comes a terrible thunderclap （雷鳴） overhead， and then the sky is full of roars of thunder.
After a while， the rain stopped and the thunder and lightning ceased. The sky became blue again， and the birds once more sang sweetly， while the trees and the flowers seemed almost as happy as before.
評(píng) 語
作者在仔細(xì)觀察的基礎(chǔ)上，動(dòng)用了大量具有“光”、“聲”、“色”等特點(diǎn)的動(dòng)詞、形容詞，運(yùn)用了比喻的手法生動(dòng)地描述了一次雷雨的過程。不過，文中部分時(shí)態(tài)值得商榷。如果為了生動(dòng)，在描述時(shí)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)代替過去時(shí)是可以的，但第二段第二句中的lit up也要改作一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，以求一致。