Last summer， I was luckily invited by the German government to join a youth group and had a 2-week free trip [visit] （1） to Germany. The purpose of the visit was to let us get to know about Germany so as to promote understanding and friendship between the young people of our two countries.On 6 July， my companion from Chengdu and I flew to Germany. During our 2-week stay， we visited Frankfort （法蘭克福）， Bonn （波恩）， München （慕尼黑）， Hamburg（漢堡）， Berlin （柏林） … nearly all the big cities in Germany. We were invited to universities， middle schools， companies， famous beautiful places， government organizations and some cultural recreation centres.
The most interesting thing in Germany was to meet young people. When we were in Bayern （巴代利亞州）， we visited a middle school. We were asked to attend their classes.
As we entered their classroom， all the students stood up and said： “Welcome！ Welcome …” When they learned the Great Wall was not far from our home town， they got excited. They asked us many questions about China. We were very pleased to tell them the great changes in China. In fact， they knew not much about China， but they were interested in getting to know about it. One of them told me that his father had travelled [been] （2） to China and he had taken back some Chinese music tapes. Their whole family enjoyed listening to the music from China. He said he would go to China for a visit one day.
When we left the classroom， I gave everyone [every one] （3） of them a special present： a postcard about China and some Chinese stamps. I said， “If you come to China， I'll certainly be very happy to show you around.” All of them were very pleased to have our Chinese stamps and cards. Their smiles left a deep impression on me.
In Hamburg， we had an evening party with some German students who were studying Chinese in Hamburg University. We sat together and had Chinese food. They were very good at using chopsticks. They tried again and again to speak Chinese. All of them were excited to meet native speakers from China. They told us that one of their subjects was how to cook Chinese food， and how to use chopsticks. After we finished our supper， we went to a bar together where we tasted German beer. They sang a Chinese song for us. It was Nan Niwan （南泥灣）。 As a matter of fact， they couldn't sing that folk song well. But that didn't matter. I asked them why they wanted to study Chinese. One of them answered：“China today is a big nation.” Another said： “I like Chinese calligraphy （書(shū)法） very much.” One of them even took out a piece of paper and wrote down a Chinese poem. He wrote it very well. I thought one day a blue-eyed and red-haired foreigner would become a Chinese-calligrapher.
All the German people we met were kind to us. In the streets， hotels， on buses， trains or planes， they were very friendly. They often said “Hello” to us first. Wherever we went， we could get help from strangers if we needed that.
Our 14-day visit passed by [passed] （4） quickly. Soon we had to fly back to China. This was an unforgettable trip. We not only got to understand something about Germany， but also felt the German people were very nice.
云南省大理劍川一中高97班（文科） 何錄中
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
何錄中同學(xué)是地處邊遠(yuǎn)山區(qū)的白族中學(xué)生，去年夏天有幸應(yīng)德國(guó)政府邀請(qǐng)參加青少年考察團(tuán)到德國(guó)進(jìn)行為期兩周的訪(fǎng)問(wèn)。這篇文章是他的訪(fǎng)德見(jiàn)聞之一。文字樸實(shí)，內(nèi)容生動(dòng)。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：（1）用trip會(huì)給人“旅途需要二周”的感覺(jué)，改為visit較好。
（2）父親訪(fǎng)問(wèn)中國(guó)后已回德國(guó)，要用had been.比較：①He has been to Beijing.（去過(guò)北京）②He has gone to Beijing.（去了北京）
（3）everyone合在一起時(shí)，后面不能用of短語(yǔ)修飾，要將every one分開(kāi)。
（4）pass by是指“空間”上“經(jīng)過(guò)……”，如：When she passed by， everyone looked up. 時(shí)間消逝用pass就可，不必加by.
The most interesting thing in Germany was to meet young people. When we were in Bayern （巴代利亞州）， we visited a middle school. We were asked to attend their classes.
As we entered their classroom， all the students stood up and said： “Welcome！ Welcome …” When they learned the Great Wall was not far from our home town， they got excited. They asked us many questions about China. We were very pleased to tell them the great changes in China. In fact， they knew not much about China， but they were interested in getting to know about it. One of them told me that his father had travelled [been] （2） to China and he had taken back some Chinese music tapes. Their whole family enjoyed listening to the music from China. He said he would go to China for a visit one day.
When we left the classroom， I gave everyone [every one] （3） of them a special present： a postcard about China and some Chinese stamps. I said， “If you come to China， I'll certainly be very happy to show you around.” All of them were very pleased to have our Chinese stamps and cards. Their smiles left a deep impression on me.
In Hamburg， we had an evening party with some German students who were studying Chinese in Hamburg University. We sat together and had Chinese food. They were very good at using chopsticks. They tried again and again to speak Chinese. All of them were excited to meet native speakers from China. They told us that one of their subjects was how to cook Chinese food， and how to use chopsticks. After we finished our supper， we went to a bar together where we tasted German beer. They sang a Chinese song for us. It was Nan Niwan （南泥灣）。 As a matter of fact， they couldn't sing that folk song well. But that didn't matter. I asked them why they wanted to study Chinese. One of them answered：“China today is a big nation.” Another said： “I like Chinese calligraphy （書(shū)法） very much.” One of them even took out a piece of paper and wrote down a Chinese poem. He wrote it very well. I thought one day a blue-eyed and red-haired foreigner would become a Chinese-calligrapher.
All the German people we met were kind to us. In the streets， hotels， on buses， trains or planes， they were very friendly. They often said “Hello” to us first. Wherever we went， we could get help from strangers if we needed that.
Our 14-day visit passed by [passed] （4） quickly. Soon we had to fly back to China. This was an unforgettable trip. We not only got to understand something about Germany， but also felt the German people were very nice.
云南省大理劍川一中高97班（文科） 何錄中
評(píng) 語(yǔ)
何錄中同學(xué)是地處邊遠(yuǎn)山區(qū)的白族中學(xué)生，去年夏天有幸應(yīng)德國(guó)政府邀請(qǐng)參加青少年考察團(tuán)到德國(guó)進(jìn)行為期兩周的訪(fǎng)問(wèn)。這篇文章是他的訪(fǎng)德見(jiàn)聞之一。文字樸實(shí)，內(nèi)容生動(dòng)。文章中某些語(yǔ)言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：（1）用trip會(huì)給人“旅途需要二周”的感覺(jué)，改為visit較好。
（2）父親訪(fǎng)問(wèn)中國(guó)后已回德國(guó)，要用had been.比較：①He has been to Beijing.（去過(guò)北京）②He has gone to Beijing.（去了北京）
（3）everyone合在一起時(shí)，后面不能用of短語(yǔ)修飾，要將every one分開(kāi)。
（4）pass by是指“空間”上“經(jīng)過(guò)……”，如：When she passed by， everyone looked up. 時(shí)間消逝用pass就可，不必加by.