一、句子之間缺少過渡性的單詞或詞組
① Salmons swim upstream， they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
② Salmons swim upstream， and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
二、省字號（'）的濫用
① the government's plan
② the plan of the government
三、代詞之間的性、數(shù)、格不一致
① Everyone has their homework.
② Everyone has his （or her） homework.
四、主句與從句的順序不當
① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over， after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.
② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds， some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.
五、雙重否定
① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當
① The forest fire， no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， jumped the firebreak.
② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， the forest fire jumped the firebreak.
七、意義含糊的先行詞
① The band members collected his and her uniforms.
② The band members collected their uniforms.
八、介詞和冠詞的濫用
① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.
② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.
九、句子缺少成分
① When aiming for the highest returns， and also thinking about the possible losses.
② When aiming for the highest returns， investors also should think about the possible losses.
十、忘記斷句
① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.
② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.
① Salmons swim upstream， they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
② Salmons swim upstream， and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
二、省字號（'）的濫用
① the government's plan
② the plan of the government
三、代詞之間的性、數(shù)、格不一致
① Everyone has their homework.
② Everyone has his （or her） homework.
四、主句與從句的順序不當
① Some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over， after the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds.
② After the NASDAQ value dropped by over two thirds， some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.
五、雙重否定
① Barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
② Barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
六、修飾語、插入語的位置不當
① The forest fire， no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， jumped the firebreak.
② No longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters， the forest fire jumped the firebreak.
七、意義含糊的先行詞
① The band members collected his and her uniforms.
② The band members collected their uniforms.
八、介詞和冠詞的濫用
① The project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.
② The government project reduces the production costs of private firms.
九、句子缺少成分
① When aiming for the highest returns， and also thinking about the possible losses.
② When aiming for the highest returns， investors also should think about the possible losses.
十、忘記斷句
① I do not recall what kind of printer it was all I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.
② I do not recall what kind of printer it was. All I remember is that it could sort， staple， and print a packet at the same time.