12月11日得了七分的作文原文，歡迎討論！
以下是我十二月十一日在長春考鴨的時候得了七分的原文，本來考完的第二天我就將它默寫下來了，無奈之后被媽媽當廢紙丟了。因此這篇文章僅僅是現(xiàn)在憑我的回憶寫出來的，不過除了個別詞語可能有所不同，文章的思路結(jié)構(gòu)和語法用詞等基本和我當時寫的文章一樣。把它貼出來并不是想向大家玄耀什么，本人也確實沒有什么才能值得炫耀，我只不過是經(jīng)過了很長時間的自我摸索和高人指點，稍微掌握了那么一點點雅思寫作的精髓，愿意拿出來與大家一起分享，也歡迎大家加入討論，其實，你看過了我的文章也就知道了，七分的雅思作文也不過如此~ 呵呵。
Topic： some people say that the subject of international news should be taught in secondary school， other people say that it is a waste of valuable school time， discuss both sides and give your opinion.
We know that a lot of fundamental and useful subjects， such as mathematics， languages， chemistry and physics had been applied in secondary school for a long period. But nowadays， some people propose that the subject of international news should also be taught in secondary school. For my part， I think， before we add a new subject to our secondary school education system， both advantages and disadvantages of the subject need to be considered deliberately.
On one hand， the subject of international news really bring about a lot of benefits to the secondary school students. To be a modern and open-mind person， the knowledge of basic science will not adequate for his or her future career， other kinds of knowledge， such as the knowledge of society， the knowledge of laws is also required in his or her practical work， otherwise， he or she will meet lots of problems that he or she could not handle. Consequently， secondary school is supposed to play not only the function of providing students with systematic and disciplined basic science knowledge， but also play the function of helping students to be more social， more open-mind and more competent in their practical work. We could hardly imagine that a modern person claim no idea about the great event happened in the world. So， it is quite reasonable to add the subject of international news in secondary school to make the students more competitive for the society.
On the other hand， spending too much time on the subjects irrelevant with basic science could be regarded as a waste of valuable school time for the students in certain circumstance. We know that the main function that secondary school play is to help student lay a solid literature foundation and provide them with necessary preparation for his future education （university，college，etc.）。 Accordingly， secondary school is supposed to put their focus on the content and improvement of teaching basic science. As for social subjects， such as international news， the educators and school managers need to arrange a proper portion of time in teaching them and provide students with a more reasonable and perfect secondary school system.
In conclusion， the subject of international news need to be taught in secondary school because of its great importance， however， it is plausible to teach this subject at a proper portion of time.
呵呵，好累啊，相當于又寫了一篇作文。下面我就談?wù)勎业膶懽黧w會吧。
第一，相信有許多人都象初學寫作的我那時一樣，通常愛犯的一個毛病就是亂用詞，亂造句，凡是自己知道的詞就都往上寫，生怕考官不知道你的詞匯量有多大，凡是能用中文說的句子就想當然得翻譯成英文。我還記得我第一次考之前拿著一篇我自以為寫得不錯的文章給一個老外看，結(jié)果他的評價是他根本就不知道我在寫什么！他說如果一篇文章里有兩到三個他看不懂的句子他就一定不會給這篇文章好分！因此建議大家不要一味得把提高作文成績的寶壓在單詞上，我上面的文章大家也看到了，有什么難詞好詞么？沒有！我覺得真正讓你得高分的是你的邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)和語言表達的清楚程度，思維一定要清晰，不要想到哪說到哪，語言不必刻意追求華麗，但一定要清楚明白。當然了，寫作過程沖的語法錯誤是很致命的，英語基礎(chǔ)不好的人一定要盡量避免寫過長的從句，倒裝句等等。我個人認為，只要你能做到我以上寫的三點，邏輯清楚，語言簡單明了，很少語法錯誤，那么即使你只有高中的英語水平，打六也是絕對不成問題的。
第二，關(guān)于背誦范文的事。我曾經(jīng)背過新東方和吳建業(yè)的范文，我不能說效果不好，我只能說他們的范文大致上只適合兩種人，第一，寫作基礎(chǔ)很差想靠背模版純應(yīng)試的人，第二，記憶力超強能把那些好詞難句都記下來在考場上默寫的人。呵呵，我寫到這里可能要被人扔西紅柿了，我絕對沒有任何對這兩位老師不恭的意思，事實上何剛老師是我非常喜愛的老師之一，我只是想說，他們的書已經(jīng)被太多的人背誦和模仿，他們只會使你更加深陷雅思的套路之中，如果你的目標是六，那你大可以去放心得背它們，但如果你的目標是七，我建議你省下背雅思作文的時間去背一背那寫經(jīng)典的外國人寫的東西，比如新概念。一旦你背得足夠多，量變導致成質(zhì)變，你就行成了那種SENSE，這是非常重要的，我第二次考鴨之前用半個月的時間背了足有三十篇專家寫的地道的雅思作文，于是背完之后我就有了這種SENSE，考了兩回都是七，我不是開玩笑，我說的都是我的親身經(jīng)歷。這不管對應(yīng)付雅思考試很重要，這對于你出國之后經(jīng)常被要求寫兩三千字的ESSAY的時候也是受益終生的。
第三，這段有做廣告的嫌疑，在我第一次考試作文打了五之后，我在我們英語系找了一個從美國留學回來的老師給我改作文。這非常有效，要知道你一周寫七篇作文，要是沒有任何長進，這種努力是毫無意義的，它不符合收獲與付出成正比這一學說，因為這只會讓你把五分或者六分的作文寫得更加嫻熟而已，而已。但是如果你能夠仔細的修改一篇，仔細分析你的不足之處，那樣你的作文水平才會真的有長進。因此我強烈建議大家在每次寫一篇新文章之前都能找人改過自己的上一篇文章，而且至少背過一篇范文。
說了這么多，也都只是我個人的一些關(guān)于寫作的看法，今天時間太匆忙，以后想到什么再補充吧，我上面有提到的我找的那個老師總共給我寫了有五十篇左右的范文，雖然我還沒有得到他的同意，但是有想看一下的同學可以先把郵箱留下來，得到他的同意后我就會盡快發(fā)給大家，祝大家好運！
以下是我十二月十一日在長春考鴨的時候得了七分的原文，本來考完的第二天我就將它默寫下來了，無奈之后被媽媽當廢紙丟了。因此這篇文章僅僅是現(xiàn)在憑我的回憶寫出來的，不過除了個別詞語可能有所不同，文章的思路結(jié)構(gòu)和語法用詞等基本和我當時寫的文章一樣。把它貼出來并不是想向大家玄耀什么，本人也確實沒有什么才能值得炫耀，我只不過是經(jīng)過了很長時間的自我摸索和高人指點，稍微掌握了那么一點點雅思寫作的精髓，愿意拿出來與大家一起分享，也歡迎大家加入討論，其實，你看過了我的文章也就知道了，七分的雅思作文也不過如此~ 呵呵。
Topic： some people say that the subject of international news should be taught in secondary school， other people say that it is a waste of valuable school time， discuss both sides and give your opinion.
We know that a lot of fundamental and useful subjects， such as mathematics， languages， chemistry and physics had been applied in secondary school for a long period. But nowadays， some people propose that the subject of international news should also be taught in secondary school. For my part， I think， before we add a new subject to our secondary school education system， both advantages and disadvantages of the subject need to be considered deliberately.
On one hand， the subject of international news really bring about a lot of benefits to the secondary school students. To be a modern and open-mind person， the knowledge of basic science will not adequate for his or her future career， other kinds of knowledge， such as the knowledge of society， the knowledge of laws is also required in his or her practical work， otherwise， he or she will meet lots of problems that he or she could not handle. Consequently， secondary school is supposed to play not only the function of providing students with systematic and disciplined basic science knowledge， but also play the function of helping students to be more social， more open-mind and more competent in their practical work. We could hardly imagine that a modern person claim no idea about the great event happened in the world. So， it is quite reasonable to add the subject of international news in secondary school to make the students more competitive for the society.
On the other hand， spending too much time on the subjects irrelevant with basic science could be regarded as a waste of valuable school time for the students in certain circumstance. We know that the main function that secondary school play is to help student lay a solid literature foundation and provide them with necessary preparation for his future education （university，college，etc.）。 Accordingly， secondary school is supposed to put their focus on the content and improvement of teaching basic science. As for social subjects， such as international news， the educators and school managers need to arrange a proper portion of time in teaching them and provide students with a more reasonable and perfect secondary school system.
In conclusion， the subject of international news need to be taught in secondary school because of its great importance， however， it is plausible to teach this subject at a proper portion of time.
呵呵，好累啊，相當于又寫了一篇作文。下面我就談?wù)勎业膶懽黧w會吧。
第一，相信有許多人都象初學寫作的我那時一樣，通常愛犯的一個毛病就是亂用詞，亂造句，凡是自己知道的詞就都往上寫，生怕考官不知道你的詞匯量有多大，凡是能用中文說的句子就想當然得翻譯成英文。我還記得我第一次考之前拿著一篇我自以為寫得不錯的文章給一個老外看，結(jié)果他的評價是他根本就不知道我在寫什么！他說如果一篇文章里有兩到三個他看不懂的句子他就一定不會給這篇文章好分！因此建議大家不要一味得把提高作文成績的寶壓在單詞上，我上面的文章大家也看到了，有什么難詞好詞么？沒有！我覺得真正讓你得高分的是你的邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)和語言表達的清楚程度，思維一定要清晰，不要想到哪說到哪，語言不必刻意追求華麗，但一定要清楚明白。當然了，寫作過程沖的語法錯誤是很致命的，英語基礎(chǔ)不好的人一定要盡量避免寫過長的從句，倒裝句等等。我個人認為，只要你能做到我以上寫的三點，邏輯清楚，語言簡單明了，很少語法錯誤，那么即使你只有高中的英語水平，打六也是絕對不成問題的。
第二，關(guān)于背誦范文的事。我曾經(jīng)背過新東方和吳建業(yè)的范文，我不能說效果不好，我只能說他們的范文大致上只適合兩種人，第一，寫作基礎(chǔ)很差想靠背模版純應(yīng)試的人，第二，記憶力超強能把那些好詞難句都記下來在考場上默寫的人。呵呵，我寫到這里可能要被人扔西紅柿了，我絕對沒有任何對這兩位老師不恭的意思，事實上何剛老師是我非常喜愛的老師之一，我只是想說，他們的書已經(jīng)被太多的人背誦和模仿，他們只會使你更加深陷雅思的套路之中，如果你的目標是六，那你大可以去放心得背它們，但如果你的目標是七，我建議你省下背雅思作文的時間去背一背那寫經(jīng)典的外國人寫的東西，比如新概念。一旦你背得足夠多，量變導致成質(zhì)變，你就行成了那種SENSE，這是非常重要的，我第二次考鴨之前用半個月的時間背了足有三十篇專家寫的地道的雅思作文，于是背完之后我就有了這種SENSE，考了兩回都是七，我不是開玩笑，我說的都是我的親身經(jīng)歷。這不管對應(yīng)付雅思考試很重要，這對于你出國之后經(jīng)常被要求寫兩三千字的ESSAY的時候也是受益終生的。
第三，這段有做廣告的嫌疑，在我第一次考試作文打了五之后，我在我們英語系找了一個從美國留學回來的老師給我改作文。這非常有效，要知道你一周寫七篇作文，要是沒有任何長進，這種努力是毫無意義的，它不符合收獲與付出成正比這一學說，因為這只會讓你把五分或者六分的作文寫得更加嫻熟而已，而已。但是如果你能夠仔細的修改一篇，仔細分析你的不足之處，那樣你的作文水平才會真的有長進。因此我強烈建議大家在每次寫一篇新文章之前都能找人改過自己的上一篇文章，而且至少背過一篇范文。
說了這么多，也都只是我個人的一些關(guān)于寫作的看法，今天時間太匆忙，以后想到什么再補充吧，我上面有提到的我找的那個老師總共給我寫了有五十篇左右的范文，雖然我還沒有得到他的同意，但是有想看一下的同學可以先把郵箱留下來，得到他的同意后我就會盡快發(fā)給大家，祝大家好運！