10月22日新托福寫作部分點(diǎn)評

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寫作
    綜合部分:
    1. Summarize the Points made in the Lecture being sure to explain how they challenge the specific Points made in the reading Passage.
    It used to be the case at most universities that only a few students Received the highest .Marks or grades But teachers today routinely give a majority of their students grades that a practice sometimes known as grade inflation .Though this practice has critics . It seems virtually irreversible .It has become part of a whole system of social and educational expectations and it can no more be changed at this point than can a tire of a moving car.
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    讀:關(guān)于在大學(xué)里面學(xué)生的高分問題
    1、low marks will frustrate the motivation of students
    2、the professor use the high grades to flatter the students因?yàn)榻虒W(xué)評估,可以影響連任和升職。
    3、job market.雇主喜歡要高分得,那代表high quality.
    聽:反駁
    1、要糾正學(xué)生的態(tài)度,讓他們知道學(xué)到知識(shí)才是重要的,分?jǐn)?shù)不能說明什么
    2、評估可以提前,long before the final exam
    3、給雇主展示平均分,分析一下分?jǐn)?shù)情況,告訴他們得A的不一定比得B的好
    閱讀材料:
    grade inflation. 閱讀材料講了這個(gè)現(xiàn)象,聲稱這個(gè)現(xiàn)象已經(jīng)相當(dāng)普遍,不能去除了。然后列舉了三個(gè)例子證明這一觀點(diǎn)。
    (1)學(xué)生們已經(jīng)習(xí)慣考試取得高分,他們認(rèn)為老師們就應(yīng)該如此慷慨的給所有同學(xué)高分。如果一旦嚴(yán)格起來,那些得到低分的同學(xué)會(huì)有挫折感,從而喪失了學(xué)習(xí)斗志。
    (2)如果講這種現(xiàn)象根除,教授們的工作會(huì)壓力大增。學(xué)生們?nèi)绻麤]有得到高分,他們評教的時(shí)候也會(huì)給教授打很低的分?jǐn)?shù)以示報(bào)復(fù)。這樣教授的飯碗不保了。
    (3)如果一些高校有g(shù)rade inflation,另外一些學(xué)校則嚴(yán)格區(qū)分學(xué)生成績。那么嚴(yán)格區(qū)分學(xué)生成績高校的學(xué)生們就會(huì)得到不公平的對待。當(dāng)他們?nèi)フ夜ぷ鞯臅r(shí)候,用人單位看到他們的成績會(huì)認(rèn)為他們不夠牛。
    聽力材料:
    演講者徹底否定了文字材料。給出了三個(gè)措施
    (1)如果從小就培養(yǎng)學(xué)生愛學(xué)習(xí)的好習(xí)慣,不是為了分?jǐn)?shù)而學(xué)習(xí)。這樣的話,當(dāng)一個(gè)學(xué)生考得不好的時(shí)候,他會(huì)認(rèn)真反省,更加努力認(rèn)真地去學(xué)習(xí)。而不是喪失斗志。
    (2)學(xué)生評教的方式應(yīng)該改變。在教授上課的過程中,學(xué)生不斷地對教授的上課態(tài)度、講課質(zhì)量等等進(jìn)行評價(jià)。而不是等到分?jǐn)?shù)出來了,再對教授進(jìn)行評價(jià)。
    (3)學(xué)校在提供成績單的同時(shí),應(yīng)該再另外提供學(xué)生的平均成績以及學(xué)生成績分布情況。這樣用人單位就能夠客觀地評價(jià)一個(gè)學(xué)生在學(xué)校中所處的位置了。
    獨(dú)立寫作
    2.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
    It is not realistic for people to expect to work at the same company or employer all of their life.
    現(xiàn)在這個(gè)年代,一個(gè)人想一輩子呆在一個(gè)單位工作是不可能的,是不現(xiàn)實(shí)的。你是否同意這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)?
    點(diǎn)評:我們先看一下21號的兩道作文題:
    1. 綜合部分:Reading: 近self employed entrepreneurs 越來越多。理由:大公司的官僚作風(fēng)、工作安全性降低,下崗工人增多、大公司削減pension并要求雇員多付medical insurance,extra salary benefit吸引力降低。
    Listening: 教師表示統(tǒng)計(jì)數(shù)據(jù)表明,self employed entrepreneur確實(shí)增多,但上述三條理由均不成立。小公司也會(huì)面臨官僚問題,與不同政府部門打交道;小公司失敗的可能高于下崗可能;大公司雖削減pension,但總體講extra salary benefit仍具吸引力。要求教師結(jié)論及與文章不同。
    2.獨(dú)立部分:COLLEGE OR UNIVERSITY 是否要開更難更有挑戰(zhàn)性的課, 同意還是不同意!
    由這兩次沒有間隔的考試我們可以看出,寫作很喜歡考學(xué)生在校學(xué)習(xí)與以后就業(yè)這種類型的題目,所以我們在平時(shí)練習(xí)時(shí)應(yīng)該多寫關(guān)于這方面的題目,至少應(yīng)該寫一下提綱。比如:
    • Topic: Teachers are responsible for motivating students to learn.
    • Disagree—S is responsible, not T
    • --learning before & after school—no T
    • Self-motivated
    • S not motivated, T cannot help
    • Parents are responsible
    • People naturally want to learn
    • My T in high school/college/university
    • Work/whole life
    • Learning no T
    這樣先由大腦風(fēng)暴法想出9個(gè)理由,從中去掉重復(fù)的以及不好寫的理由,留下3個(gè)比較利于自己展開論述的理由(上面劃線處),注意在獨(dú)立部分中只有能夠自圓其說就可以了,沒有對或錯(cuò)的觀點(diǎn)!同時(shí)需要確定主題句,我們再舉一例:
    • Topic: spend one’s leisure time doing activities with a lot of people or in quiet ways by themselves or with one other person.
    • Thesis: since I work mainly by myself in my job as a computer specialist, I prefer leisure activities with other people that provide enjoyment, exercise, and teamwork.
    這里是一個(gè)好主題的標(biāo)志:有觀點(diǎn)(I prefer leisure activities with other people);有概括性引出觀點(diǎn)的理由(since I work mainly by myself in my job as a computer specialist);有暗示三個(gè)分論點(diǎn)的小列舉(enjoyment, exercise, and teamwork)。
    如果大家能夠把獨(dú)立部分185道題中的每一道題目都這樣去寫提綱和主題句。那么獨(dú)立部分就不會(huì)有什么大問題了,同時(shí)口語1—2題也基本解決了。
    后,我將分別把綜合部分以及獨(dú)立部分的滿分官方評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)寫在下面,希望大家能仔細(xì)體會(huì):
    綜合部分:
    • 5: a response at this level successfully selects the important information from the lecture and coherently and accurately presents this information in relation to the relevant information presented in the reading. The response is well organized, and occasional language errors that are present do not result in inaccurate or imprecise presentation of content or connections.
    獨(dú)立部分:
    • An essay at 5 level:
    • Effectively addresses the task by clearly stating an opinion
    • Is well organized and well developed with appropriate examples, reasons, or details; and displays unity and coherence
    • Uses language effectively, with sentence variety and appropriate word choice and only occasional minor language errors.
    考場細(xì)節(jié)
    考場內(nèi)不能吃東西,包括口香糖!
    注意考前的踩點(diǎn),熟悉環(huán)境可以避免緊張。
    平時(shí)注意排干擾能力的培養(yǎng),因?yàn)槎鷻C(jī)不能夠抵抗一些特別大聲的同學(xué);同時(shí),由于是一個(gè)個(gè)進(jìn)考場的,所以肯定會(huì)有干擾。
    三張草稿紙全部要回收,鉛筆需要換必須先退回原來的!
    口語的準(zhǔn)備時(shí)間不是用來答題的,不要過于緊張。
    由于考試時(shí)間較長,注意吃飯,但不能吃太飽,7—8分:)
    閱讀后面的大題較難,不要在前面過多浪費(fèi)時(shí)間。
    非常感謝熱心的學(xué)員們無私地把真題以及考試感受與我們大家分享,我們會(huì)繼續(xù)及時(shí)、準(zhǔn)確、負(fù)責(zé)地將考試的真題與備考策略公布,請各位注意關(guān)注!