專(zhuān)業(yè)八級(jí)改錯(cuò)練習(xí)-36

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The violence within a society is controlled through institutionsof law. The most developed a legal system becomes, the more __1__ societies takes responsibility for the discovery, control, and punishment __2__ of violent acts. In most tribal societies the only means to dealing with __3__ an act of violence is revenge. Each family group may have the responsibility for personal carrying out judgment and punishment __4__ upon the person who did the offense. __5__ But in legal systems, the responsibility for revenge becomes personalized and diffused. The society assumes the responsibility for __6__ protecting individuals from violence. In cases where he cannot be __7__ protected, the society is responsible for committing punishment. __8__ In a state controlling legal system, individuals are removed __9__ from the circle of revenge motivated by acts of violence, and the __10__ state assumes responsibility for their protection.
    【答案】
    1.most改為more.這句話(huà)實(shí)際上使用了the more…the more…結(jié)果,表示"一個(gè)法律制度越完善,社會(huì)在其中所負(fù)的責(zé)任越大".
    2.societies改為society.society 這里應(yīng)選擇單數(shù)因?yàn)樵涞囊馑际?一個(gè)國(guó)家的法律制度越完善,社會(huì)在發(fā)現(xiàn),控制,和懲治暴力行為中所承擔(dān)的責(zé)任就越大",含義是單數(shù)的,所以應(yīng)該使用單數(shù)形式??荚嚧?BR>    3.dealing改為deal.the means to 詞組里的to是不定式的to,因此后面應(yīng)接動(dòng)詞原型。
    4.personal改為personally.這里personally修飾carrying out judgment…,因此是使用副詞。
    5.did改為committed.offense經(jīng)常與commit,cause,take,give搭配,這里用commit the offense 表示"犯罪".
    6.personalized改為depersonalized.前面一句話(huà)指明在部族社會(huì)"懲惡揚(yáng)善"是家族或個(gè)人的事,而在法制社會(huì)里,"復(fù)仇"這一任務(wù)不再由個(gè)人擔(dān)當(dāng),而是交給社會(huì),因此這里不應(yīng)使用personalized,而應(yīng)使用depersonalized,表示"非個(gè)人化".
    7.he改為they.這里代詞he與前面它所指代的名詞individuals不一致,應(yīng)為they.
    8.committing改為imposing.commit的意思是"犯(錯(cuò)誤),干(壞事),把…交拖給,答應(yīng)負(fù)責(zé)",在這里不適合,應(yīng)改為impose.
    9.controlling改為controlled.中心詞legal system和control的關(guān)系是被動(dòng)的,法律制度是被國(guó)家控制的。
    10.circle改為cycle.circle和cycle的區(qū)別在于circle表示"圈子",如:a circle of friends,而cycle表示"循環(huán),周期",如: the cycle of birth