雅思寫作7分句評析

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下面這些句子全部來自于雅思高分作文(7分水平以上),看看下面這些句子你的表達和這里提供的model answer是否一致,如果基本一致的話,恭喜你!說明你的雅思寫作水平已經(jīng)達到7分的水準(zhǔn)啦!
    1. 一個人的實際能力才是企業(yè)所真正看重的。
    It is one's practical capabilitythat enterprises truly value.
    (這句話用強調(diào)句句型表達效果比較好。)
    2. 我認為我們發(fā)明一種新的語言來取代英語是沒有必要的.
    I don't think it necessary to invent a new kind of language to take the place of English.
    (這句話有太多的同學(xué)用"instead of"來表示“取代”的意思,再次強調(diào),instead of是介詞詞組,表示"......而不是......"的意思。)
    3. 然而,關(guān)于它是一件好事還是壞事,人們有不同的態(tài)度。
    People, nevertheless, hold various opinions in terms of the issuewhether it is a blessing or a curse.
    (這句話有很多人用"good thing"和"bad thing"表示“好事”和“壞事”,在書面語中推薦用blessing和curse,絕對的less common vocabulary!)
    4. 很多國家的失業(yè)率在不斷攀升這一事實是我們無法否認的。
    The fact that the unemployment rates in quite a number of countries keep rising can not be denied.
    5. 在給出我的觀點之前,我認為看一看問題的兩面是很重要的。
    I hold it essential to examine the both sides of the issue before presenting my viewpoint.
    (這句話有幾個重點:首先表示“看一看”不宜用"look at",那是“盯著...看”的意思,examine是“仔細審視”的意思,用在這里正合適?!皢栴}”在這里應(yīng)該用issue而不是problem,因為 problem相當(dāng)于trouble,一定是負面的。Issue表示“有爭議的問題”,大家記住,雅思作文里討論的話題絕大多數(shù)都屬于issue。此外,present屬于less common vocabulary,是“give”的升級版。)
    6. 不同的人們對于全球化是否有利于經(jīng)濟的發(fā)展這個問題持有不同的看法.
    Different people hold various viewpoints as to the issue whether globalization is beneficialto the economic development.
    7. 令人感到遺憾的是大多數(shù)人所在乎的僅僅就只是他們怎么樣才能更多地賺到錢。
    It is a pity that all the majority of people care about is how they could be paid more.
    8. 隨著越來越多的婦女參與全職工作,由誰來照顧孩子已經(jīng)成為了社會上的一個問題。
    With increasing number of women taking part in full-time jobs, who should take care of children has become a social issue.
    (注意with引導(dǎo)的成分名詞后面必須跟動詞的ing形式,很多同學(xué)這一題一上來就寫"With more and more women take part in full-time job"是錯誤的。)
    第二單元:定語從句
    1. (Letter) 我們這次還是約在上次一起吃晚飯的餐廳見面吧!
    Let’s meet at the restaurant where we had dinner together last time!
    2. ( 寫作) 環(huán)境保護是一個如今為人們廣為討論的一個話題。
    The environmental protectionis a topic (which is) widely discussed by people nowadays.
    3. ( 寫作) 我們必須承認,那些反對此觀點的人們也有一定的道理。
    Admittedly, those who oppose to the viewpoint also have their reasons to a certain extent.
    4. ( 寫作) 人們往往會和觀念與自己相近的人交朋友。
    People tend to make friends with those people whose viewpointsare similar to their own.
    People tend to make friends with those who share similar viewpoints to their own.
    5. ( 寫作) 手提電腦如今如此普及的一個重要原因就是它的使用方便。
    A major reason why lap-tops are so popular nowadays is that it is easy to use.
    6.( 口語) 我計劃于2010年回國,到那時候我將年滿30歲。
    I am planning to come back in 2010, by which time (when) I will be 30.
    7. ( 口語) 《荷馬史詩》是一本很精彩的書,我從中學(xué)到了很多。
    Homer Epic is a wonderful book, from which I have learned a lot.
    8. ( 口語) 最激動人心的一次旅行經(jīng)歷是在巴厘島,在那里我有生以來第一次體驗了潛水。
    The most exciting traveling experience for me is the one in Bali, where I experienced diving for the first time in my life.
    9. ( 口語) 我父母一共生了三個孩子,我是其中的。
    My parents have three children, among whom I am the eldest.
    10. ( 口語) David和我住在一個寢室已經(jīng)兩年了,他是一個非常搞笑的家伙。
    David, with whom I have been sharing a dormfor 2 years, is quite a funny guy.
    David, who is quite a funny guy, has been sharing a dorm with me for 2 years.