高考滿分作文及點(diǎn)評（2）

高考滿分作文二
    Dear Peter，
     I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
     I have been learning English for two years and I hope to find an English pen friend so that I can get more improvement. Can you help me to find one？
     Id like to have a boy， who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports， to be my pen friend. In my opinion， people of the same age often have something to exchange. Thats why I want him to be of my age. If he likes doggy， that would be better because I can tell him something about my little doggy.Id be very thankful if you can help me. Hope to hear from you！
     Best regards，
     Li Hua
     點(diǎn)評：
     從整體上來說，本文寫得還是符合要求的，內(nèi)容完整，要點(diǎn)和結(jié)構(gòu)也很齊全。語言的使用不在于華麗的辭藻而在于其一些復(fù)雜句子的組織。最值得我們學(xué)習(xí)的就是像好詞和好句中列舉的表達(dá)法。全文流暢而連貫，適合于模仿。
     積累卡片
     好詞
     1.improvement n 改進(jìn)
     2.do sb. a favor 幫助某人
     3. doggy n.小狗
     好句
     1. I’d like to have a boy， who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports， to be my pen friend.我想尋找一個(gè)和我年紀(jì)相仿，喜歡旅游、體育的男孩來做我的筆友。
     好處：of my age 年紀(jì)相仿；be fond of 喜歡。
     2.That’s why I want him to be of my age，這就是為什么我希望筆友跟我年紀(jì)相仿的原因。