Now we all have a good friend. Do you know “who” is it [it is] （1）？ It's the English newspaper of our school——“Sunrise”。 From it we can read many good compositions， poems， stories and learn a lot of English knowledge.
Our teachers often tell us to read more， write more and practise more in order to learn English well. With the teachers' help， we often write some compositions in English. To our enjoyment， we have “Sunrise” now， and some of our good English compositions can possibly （2） be carried （登載） in it. This has greatly encouraged us and helped us to improve our English. Since “Sunrise” was started last term， many students have showed great interest in English， especially in English writing. “Sunrise” has become our own English garden. We read it， care for it and develop it， treating it as our good friend.
We are thankful to our English teachers for their unselfish and hard work， especially to Mr Xie. He spent a lot of his spare time working on the paper. He went over the drafts （草稿）， edited （編排） the articles and so on. He posted and recommended （推薦）“Sunrise” to national or provincial English newspapers and magazines. Now some English experts and professors think highly of it， congratulating it [and have congratulated us on it] （3） . Several best articles of “Sunrise” have been chosen to bepublished in their English newspapers and magazines.
I wish“Sunrise” could rise higher and higher. I'll keep on practising writing and reading. “Sunrise” will be my good friend for ever.
江西省寧岡縣寧岡中學(xué)高二（4）班 黃霞
評 語
江西省寧岡縣寧岡中學(xué)自辦的英文小報Sunrise在該校英語學(xué)習(xí)中發(fā)揮了巨大的作用。受到了學(xué)生們的歡迎。本文作者用熱烈的筆調(diào)介紹了這份英文小報，同時表達(dá)了對辦報教師的感激之情。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）who 引導(dǎo)的是賓語從句，it指前面的 a good friend，應(yīng)該作主語，所以要用陳述語序。
（2）possibly語義與can重復(fù)，可刪去。
（3）應(yīng)用 congratulate sb.on sth.，而且，由于這里congratulate的含義也較重要，應(yīng)該與 think highly of并列用作第二謂語。
Our teachers often tell us to read more， write more and practise more in order to learn English well. With the teachers' help， we often write some compositions in English. To our enjoyment， we have “Sunrise” now， and some of our good English compositions can possibly （2） be carried （登載） in it. This has greatly encouraged us and helped us to improve our English. Since “Sunrise” was started last term， many students have showed great interest in English， especially in English writing. “Sunrise” has become our own English garden. We read it， care for it and develop it， treating it as our good friend.
We are thankful to our English teachers for their unselfish and hard work， especially to Mr Xie. He spent a lot of his spare time working on the paper. He went over the drafts （草稿）， edited （編排） the articles and so on. He posted and recommended （推薦）“Sunrise” to national or provincial English newspapers and magazines. Now some English experts and professors think highly of it， congratulating it [and have congratulated us on it] （3） . Several best articles of “Sunrise” have been chosen to bepublished in their English newspapers and magazines.
I wish“Sunrise” could rise higher and higher. I'll keep on practising writing and reading. “Sunrise” will be my good friend for ever.
江西省寧岡縣寧岡中學(xué)高二（4）班 黃霞
評 語
江西省寧岡縣寧岡中學(xué)自辦的英文小報Sunrise在該校英語學(xué)習(xí)中發(fā)揮了巨大的作用。受到了學(xué)生們的歡迎。本文作者用熱烈的筆調(diào)介紹了這份英文小報，同時表達(dá)了對辦報教師的感激之情。文章中某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）who 引導(dǎo)的是賓語從句，it指前面的 a good friend，應(yīng)該作主語，所以要用陳述語序。
（2）possibly語義與can重復(fù)，可刪去。
（3）應(yīng)用 congratulate sb.on sth.，而且，由于這里congratulate的含義也較重要，應(yīng)該與 think highly of并列用作第二謂語。