I've seen many films. But so far as I am concerned， the American film The Lion King is one of the best films I've ever seen. I enjoy it， not only because there are so many beautiful scenes in it， but also [because] （1） it is really an instructive （有教育意義的） film.
At the first sight of the little lion， a lovely creature， I was attracted by it. And at the same time， I couldn't help admiring the full imagination of the cartoonists （動畫片制作者） [who created this wonderful film ]（2）。 With the development of the story， the pure little lion was cheated by his uncle， a wicked fellow， again and again. At last， his father， the lion king， was killed by his uncle. Fortunately， the little lion fled and began his new life with two new friends. Having experienced so much， the little lion grew up. He began to know the real meaning of responsibility. Finally he beat his uncle and became the new lion king like his father.
I call it a [an] （3） instructive film because I think there is similarity （相同性） between the little lion and our new generation. We haven't experienced much， so we lack of [lack] （4）experience. We always think highly of ourselves. But when in face of difficulty， we don't know how to deal with it.
So this is a film that has the time-honoured moral（寓意）that flowers in a green-house can't grow well in other places. Only after experiencing and overcoming difficulty can we really grow up.
上海市第十中學高二（3）班 馬思慧
評 語
這是一篇影片觀后感。作者先介紹了影片的主要情節(jié)，然后談了自己的看法以及為什么會有這樣的看法。文章結構完整，某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）not only…but also…連接兩個because從句，故后句應加上because.
（2）這里的cartoonist必須加上定語，指明是哪些cartoonists.
（3）這里instructive是元音字母開頭，不定冠詞要用an.
（4）lack可作及物動詞用。作名詞用時，后面才需用介詞of，如：The tree died for lack of water.
At the first sight of the little lion， a lovely creature， I was attracted by it. And at the same time， I couldn't help admiring the full imagination of the cartoonists （動畫片制作者） [who created this wonderful film ]（2）。 With the development of the story， the pure little lion was cheated by his uncle， a wicked fellow， again and again. At last， his father， the lion king， was killed by his uncle. Fortunately， the little lion fled and began his new life with two new friends. Having experienced so much， the little lion grew up. He began to know the real meaning of responsibility. Finally he beat his uncle and became the new lion king like his father.
I call it a [an] （3） instructive film because I think there is similarity （相同性） between the little lion and our new generation. We haven't experienced much， so we lack of [lack] （4）experience. We always think highly of ourselves. But when in face of difficulty， we don't know how to deal with it.
So this is a film that has the time-honoured moral（寓意）that flowers in a green-house can't grow well in other places. Only after experiencing and overcoming difficulty can we really grow up.
上海市第十中學高二（3）班 馬思慧
評 語
這是一篇影片觀后感。作者先介紹了影片的主要情節(jié)，然后談了自己的看法以及為什么會有這樣的看法。文章結構完整，某些語言上的不足之處點評修改如下：
（1）not only…but also…連接兩個because從句，故后句應加上because.
（2）這里的cartoonist必須加上定語，指明是哪些cartoonists.
（3）這里instructive是元音字母開頭，不定冠詞要用an.
（4）lack可作及物動詞用。作名詞用時，后面才需用介詞of，如：The tree died for lack of water.