It was the morning of April 6th， 2003. At about 7：30， I went to school by bike as usual. It was a rainy day and the road was slippery. On the way， I noticed a boy riding in front of me， talking loudly with his friends. He didn't wear a raincoat； instead he held an umbrella in one hand， the rode with another hand. As he turned left to Guangming Road， he failed to see a car coming from behind a truck parked on the corner. Suddenly I heard a big noise and saw an umbrella thrown away. The boy was knocked down by the car. I was completely shocked.
I think the boy's absent-mindedness accounted much for the accident. He was talking all the time and dangerously used an umbrella while riding a bike. The weather also played a role in the tragedy. The third cause was the unproperly parked truck， which was big enough to make the road conditions invisible to the students who were going to make a turn. All these contributed to the accident.
It was 8：00 this morning， I went on my way to school. When I just at the school gate， I saw the terrible traffic accident happened.
A student ride his bike in a high speed， and just when he arrived the school gate， a large truck traveled out of the gate and hit him down. He flied over 3m before his bike hit him on the ground， surely， the poor boy was hurt very bad.
I think there are two reasons for the accident. First， it was just the time we began our first class， the bike rider perhaps did not want to be late， he ride his bike so fast， even didn't low down his speed at the gate. Second， the truck is too large， and at that time， there were too many people walk through the gate， so the bike driver have no other way to chose， but to ride in the middle of the road.
（說(shuō)明： 所有樣卷都是考生的實(shí)際作文卷，典型地反映了每一分?jǐn)?shù)段的應(yīng)有水平，其中的語(yǔ)言上的錯(cuò)誤或不妥之處，包括語(yǔ)法、搭配、用詞等，悉數(shù)保持原樣。）
五、常見(jiàn)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤分類
語(yǔ)言是評(píng)判作文的一個(gè)極其重要的因素。在實(shí)際的閱卷過(guò)程中，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，尤其是較為嚴(yán)重的錯(cuò)誤，是閱卷人員的主要“照顧點(diǎn)”，有時(shí)甚至是惟一的點(diǎn)；當(dāng)然那樣處理是有道理的，大家可以設(shè)想一下，一篇語(yǔ)法上漏洞百出、嚴(yán)重影響表達(dá)的作文又會(huì)有什么樣的好內(nèi)容呢？如果因?yàn)檎Z(yǔ)言上的錯(cuò)誤而導(dǎo)致失分，那將得不償失。因此，認(rèn)清各種各樣的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，盡可能地避免少犯，對(duì)于提高作文分是有極大的幫助的。現(xiàn)將我們?cè)陂喚磉^(guò)程中所發(fā)現(xiàn)的大量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤逐一歸類，抽出其中的典型錯(cuò)誤，以警示大家，供參考。1、句子成分殘缺不全
I think the boy's absent-mindedness accounted much for the accident. He was talking all the time and dangerously used an umbrella while riding a bike. The weather also played a role in the tragedy. The third cause was the unproperly parked truck， which was big enough to make the road conditions invisible to the students who were going to make a turn. All these contributed to the accident.
It was 8：00 this morning， I went on my way to school. When I just at the school gate， I saw the terrible traffic accident happened.
A student ride his bike in a high speed， and just when he arrived the school gate， a large truck traveled out of the gate and hit him down. He flied over 3m before his bike hit him on the ground， surely， the poor boy was hurt very bad.
I think there are two reasons for the accident. First， it was just the time we began our first class， the bike rider perhaps did not want to be late， he ride his bike so fast， even didn't low down his speed at the gate. Second， the truck is too large， and at that time， there were too many people walk through the gate， so the bike driver have no other way to chose， but to ride in the middle of the road.
（說(shuō)明： 所有樣卷都是考生的實(shí)際作文卷，典型地反映了每一分?jǐn)?shù)段的應(yīng)有水平，其中的語(yǔ)言上的錯(cuò)誤或不妥之處，包括語(yǔ)法、搭配、用詞等，悉數(shù)保持原樣。）
五、常見(jiàn)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤分類
語(yǔ)言是評(píng)判作文的一個(gè)極其重要的因素。在實(shí)際的閱卷過(guò)程中，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，尤其是較為嚴(yán)重的錯(cuò)誤，是閱卷人員的主要“照顧點(diǎn)”，有時(shí)甚至是惟一的點(diǎn)；當(dāng)然那樣處理是有道理的，大家可以設(shè)想一下，一篇語(yǔ)法上漏洞百出、嚴(yán)重影響表達(dá)的作文又會(huì)有什么樣的好內(nèi)容呢？如果因?yàn)檎Z(yǔ)言上的錯(cuò)誤而導(dǎo)致失分，那將得不償失。因此，認(rèn)清各種各樣的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤，盡可能地避免少犯，對(duì)于提高作文分是有極大的幫助的。現(xiàn)將我們?cè)陂喚磉^(guò)程中所發(fā)現(xiàn)的大量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤逐一歸類，抽出其中的典型錯(cuò)誤，以警示大家，供參考。1、句子成分殘缺不全