托福備考資料:T友寫作范文匯總(十五)

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IC:Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes.Other believe that going to classes should be optional for students.Which point do you agree with?Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.
    Recently,there have been a large number of university students who do not attend classes. So serious is the problem that it attracts general public's attention. It is quite understandable that there are not only one answer to such a vital question. Some people maintain that university students should attend classes. Other assert that the students should decide by themselves.
    Two advantages are held to suppose the former view. Firstly, provided the students attend all the classes which are required, they will learn much more knowledge than study by themselves. Generally,students think they are more than smart, they have thoroughly understood all knowledge of the book. But in fact, many small points which are very essential are often ignored.When facing to the final exa, they begin to regret. Secondly, teachers can help students find out their disadvantages. In the university, all the teachers are full of experience, they know most mistakes that students often make, and they can point them out before students make a bad habit.
    Even though there are so many benefits, some people still think that whether go to classes or not should be optional for students. For the one hand, different students have different abilities, some of them spend one hour finishing one test, bet the same test may cost some students two hours. So, if all student must attend all classes, it seem quite unfair to the clever students, in that they will waste much time on the classes. For the other hand, the teachers can not take care all the students. It is particularly understandable that good students are much more popular, so teachers may unconsiously pay more attention to them than to the other students. Thus the bad students will become worse and worse.
    From my perspective, I will suppose the second opinion. In that different people possess different interest, if all the students must have the same calsses, there is less time for them to develop their advantages. In addition, I think the university students should have ability to control themselve, even though there are some people to oversee you now, you will be oneself in future, and then, what could you do? So, I agree with the second view.
    修改意見:
    (一)
    Two advantages are held to suppose the former view. Firstly, provided the students attend all the classes which are required, they will learn much more knowledge than study by themselves. Generally,students think they are more than smart, they have thoroughly understood all knowledge of the book. But in fact, many small points which are very essential are often ignored.When facing to the final exa, they begin to regret. Secondly, teachers can help students find out their disadvantages. In the university, all the teachers are full of experience, they know most mistakes that students often make, and they can point them out before students make a bad habit.
    兩個(gè)which are有點(diǎn)重復(fù),可不可以把后面的表達(dá)換一下。
    disadvantages用的有點(diǎn)突兀,而且與段首的兩個(gè)advantages意思有交叉。
    make這個(gè)詞本身無可厚非,但也許用form更好一點(diǎn)。
    it seems quite unfair to the clever students, in that they will waste much time on the classes. For the other hand, the teachers can not take care of all the students.
    這兩個(gè)應(yīng)該都是typo了
    (二)
    我覺得這邊文章內(nèi)容已經(jīng)很詳實(shí)了, 但是如果在開頭就表明觀點(diǎn)會(huì)好一點(diǎn).這個(gè)題不太適合50-50 的寫法.ETS應(yīng)該不喜歡這種到最后才表明觀點(diǎn)的文章.