Housework is often too heavy for our parents， especially for our mothers. Although we are very busy working at our lessons， I think we should do some housework for our parents， because our parents are also busy and tired after a day's work. They care for us and we should care for them too. What's more， doing housework also can [can also] （1） help us learn to look after ourselves and make our tired brains relax.
But， now， many parents don't let their daughters or sonsdo anything， because they hope that their children can have more time for lessons so that they can go to university and then have good jobs. But some of them [us] （2）don't make good use of the time. They just take it for granted that the housework is something done by parents. In other words， they don't value the time， or rather， they are just wasting the time.
I think we should study hard every day in order to learn all the lessons well. At the same time， we should also do some housework every day. It is good for us. Now we are not small children any longer. We should spend our some spare time [some of our spare time ] （3 ） on housework to reduce our parents' burdens.
江西省新干縣七琴中學(xué)高二（3）班 曾少明
評(píng) 語
文章向廣大學(xué)生朋友提出了值得認(rèn)真思考的問題：如何利用好父母親為我們辛勤創(chuàng)造的學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間？是否應(yīng)該力所能及地幫助父母親承擔(dān)一些家務(wù)？作者在用事實(shí)反駁了錯(cuò)誤觀點(diǎn)后，正面提出了自己對(duì)這些問題的看法。文中某些語言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）also放在情態(tài)動(dòng)詞can后為好。
（2）them指代不清，順前文讀來，可能誤認(rèn)為指parentS.
（3）從語法上來看，所有格和some均為中位限定詞，不能并排使用，故改之。
But， now， many parents don't let their daughters or sonsdo anything， because they hope that their children can have more time for lessons so that they can go to university and then have good jobs. But some of them [us] （2）don't make good use of the time. They just take it for granted that the housework is something done by parents. In other words， they don't value the time， or rather， they are just wasting the time.
I think we should study hard every day in order to learn all the lessons well. At the same time， we should also do some housework every day. It is good for us. Now we are not small children any longer. We should spend our some spare time [some of our spare time ] （3 ） on housework to reduce our parents' burdens.
江西省新干縣七琴中學(xué)高二（3）班 曾少明
評(píng) 語
文章向廣大學(xué)生朋友提出了值得認(rèn)真思考的問題：如何利用好父母親為我們辛勤創(chuàng)造的學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間？是否應(yīng)該力所能及地幫助父母親承擔(dān)一些家務(wù)？作者在用事實(shí)反駁了錯(cuò)誤觀點(diǎn)后，正面提出了自己對(duì)這些問題的看法。文中某些語言上的不足之處點(diǎn)評(píng)修改如下：
（1）also放在情態(tài)動(dòng)詞can后為好。
（2）them指代不清，順前文讀來，可能誤認(rèn)為指parentS.
（3）從語法上來看，所有格和some均為中位限定詞，不能并排使用，故改之。